Well, last night I had a dream of some sort of zombie invasion. And I thought to myself, I said, "Self, this is the makings of a good story." So, allow me to set the scene. Sit back and enjoy! =)
Imagine The Matrix only the sinister future holds a more gruesome outcome. An obvious leader stands in the middle of a crescent shaped group of ill fated, scared men and women. This leader, a woman, declares that this is the final stand the human race has before the zombie hordes ruin everything...
Behind her is their champion, the Neo of the human race if you will. He has the typical look; Sun glasses, tattered leather jacket, and a blank expression. (Yes, as corny as this sounds, that's me in this dream.) He doesn't seem scared of death, nor does he seem to feel any compassion for his team. Typical bad ass.
"Let's go team!" Says the leader, "And good luck." But before everyone leaves, the champion says his one and only epic line; "Today humanity dies. There is no life after this."
Then there's the epic fight scene, and people die, and zombies eat, and the world goes 'round. It's still a work in progress, so we'll see where this takes me. I'm not 100% sure, but I think I'm going to make this into a piece I can have assessed by my peers (aka, you). Comments would be nice, just saying. Thanks!
Jammer
This sounds quite awesome, if I do say so myself. xD It sounds just like the kind of gory epicness that I would go about reading!
ReplyDeleteI like the idea, and I think you could probably do a lot with it. The line, "Today humanity dies. There is no life after this." is quite a good one, and not something that you'd expect the main hero-esque character to say, which gives it its own twist.
However, I suggest tweaking a few things, such as the main character being the "Neo" of the human race. With making that comparison, I've got this mental image of Neo in my head being the main character. lol, Don't get me wrong, Neo is quite the badass, but he's been done before. So if I were you, I'd make the character more my own than one that has already been created, in order to make the character more memorable.
That's really the only problem I had with it. Although I do understand that this is just a quick, condensed synopsis of something that has a lot more behind it, so you were probably already going to do that. xD
Sorry, I tend to rant.
Well this is the kind of feedback I need. Yes, I agree 100% about the whole "Neo" thing. And yes, I did intend to change him up a bit. I figured he'd have tattered, worn clothing, seeing how he's one of the last living humans left and all. What do you think?
ReplyDeleteHmm...that greatly depends on at which point you decide to begin your story, and/or how long you're thinking about making it. If you're planning on having it take place towards the end of the invasion, then I'd go with the tattered/ beat up look. But if you were planning on starting it in the beginning of the invasion, as in going through all of the details of how he came into being the leader of the remaining humans, then I'd start with the leather and then towards the end change to tattered and worn.
ReplyDeleteBut keep in mind that I'm a sucker for leather, so my opinion on what you should have him wearing might be slightly biased. xD